Entry # 6 bad breaks
Hey my kings, and hey my queens! today I just want to slow it down and talk to you guys, first and foremost I recently broke my hand and had to have surgery all because I was messing around with a friend and hit a wall, but as you all might think, when you break a bone it hurts like crazy and your crying and its all bad, but in my own opinion it doesn't hurt that much, and I think that a few of you can agree with me on this. When I actually hit my hand all it did for me was go numb instantly and it only hurt, the day after when I went to school before going to the hospital, and right after when I tried to move my hand. In my life when I would talk to people and they all told me about breaking something I would pride myself with the fact that I could say I have never broken a bone before but now being on this side of the fence, it doesn't discourage me knowing that I finally cant say that anymore, but rather gives me clarity in a way to say that I did break a bone and I was able to overcome it. I do urge that you still do try and be as careful as you can so that you don't have to experience that pain if you haven't yet, but I do say that it is really nothing to be afraid of and you can move on and be stronger from it. When I found out that I had a broken bone, at first I thought that the doctor was joking but as time ticked by I found out that she was serious and also told me that I needed surgery because the bone in my hand had shifted to look like an addition symbol (+) instead of just running along the side of all the other bones (=) like so. Again guys just be careful when your doing anything but also don't be afraid to live your life.
Jacob--You have some good topics and points, but you are still not developing your content or your rhetoric very much. Keep digging into analysis and significance. Work more on creating strong context for your ideas. Start developing better visual engagement for your audience with images and text formatting that isn't just a solid block of text. Edit more carefully.
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